Some eyes just gleam
and, others glare
Some flash, or glaze
Behind a stare
Beware the orbs
Whose smiles alight
These will betray
Intent at sight
Though falsest face
A mask belies
The truth will speak
Through twinkling eyes.
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© 8/28/18 Ruth Ann Scanzillo All rights those of the author, whose name appears above this line. Please respect original material. Thank you very much.
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Good start, but needs perfecting ! 🙂
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Ooh – my harshest critic (and, most effective provocateur! 😉 Hints? Helps?
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You’re the poet & you said it was first draft! Its a good idea, but I think it would be good to refine it, sharpen it up here and there, the last stanza is currently the best! ❤
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Interestingly, the last stanza is more or less the climax of the other two. Talking about various eyes, and their nature, the twinkling eyes are the ones most empowering to their VIEWER because they cannot help but reveal the person’s truth. One can act fierce, but not be feeling fierce at all (stanza two is really identical in its intent to stanza three, because they are each describing the same kind of eyes); however, when eyes twinkle, they reveal the true feelings of the “actor”, whether or not said truth is intentionally being revealed. They are a barometric indicator.
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Yeah, I understood the story, trouble with that is when they twinkle, I’m to busy thinking uh-oh! To think about what they’re actually saying! 😉 😉
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p.s. as usual, WAYYY behind on your stuff…..sigh….
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Well its time to get with it! 😀 😉 Xx
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